grey cloudy sky
splash of red bleeding into the cloth
split by knife hook up the belly
despair of mouths that drip honey on the carpet
flies stick to lips
legs locked in rigor mortis
toes curl into question marks
in death my body is melting
as my mind seeps into the thick air
a hot dirty room at the bottom of the steps
in an hundred year house
a house of death
like every house
before I moved into my 2 & 2 on the water
an old woman died in my bedroom
when I moved in her hangers were in the closet
now I use them to hang my shirts
I sleep with her every night
her cold body tosses in my bed
when I can't sleep
she tells me stories
her creaky voice
scratches my ear
but it's not her
just the remembrance of her
and I finally drift away...
softly, slowly, seeping past the bath plug
into dark rusty pipes
I am a drown mouse
my tiny bones pushed through soaked fur
I am peaceful
what peace is there when all things cease
there is no god
there is no spirit
there is nothing waiting for us after we die
when we die all things cease
we cease
I will fall and hit the floor
and then I will fall no more




Comments: 6
nice poem, maybe try and shorten some of your lines and change out some words like there is nothing wating for us after we die could be, nothing when we are gone.
otherwise good! 9!